harry hayes Posted June 17, 2009 Report Share Posted June 17, 2009 Our 50 th wedding anniversary. Hope to read out the following as part of my speech (and distribute copies later). I appreciate there is an argument for the last two verses being transposed. As it is, it suits my character, but I may well be wrong. A female view in particular, would be appreciated. Partners Fifty years we've been together, Not too many more remain; Should nature but allow it, I'd love to start again. We've had some laughs together, The odd tear along the way; You've shared with me each season, And eased my doubts away. So many times I've looked to you, And sought your best advice; "Your face is like your passport, Try smiling once or twice". Our hair looks very grey now- They're the ones that don,t fall out; Wrinkles where the smiles were, The price of lfe, no doubt. Why did three little words, Become so difficult to say? Hear now, dear wife,"I love you" In print - as from today. God's finger will shortly touch me, A call I can't delay; Please madamme , your secret, What happened to "obey?" ....... Harry Hayes, 6.2009. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dizzy Posted June 17, 2009 Report Share Posted June 17, 2009 Ooooh I suppose it depends on whether your wife has a sense of humour and understands you Personally I think it's very good indeed and (although if it was addressed to me I think I'd thump you very hard after I'd stopped laughing and then I'd give you a big hug ) The first and second verse brought a bit of a tear to my eye especially the bits about 'not many more years remaining' and 'I'd love to start again'. The third verse quicly snapped me out of it with the shock of what you put Fourth and fifth verse lovely again Sixth verse sad again in part until I read the last sentence : I think it's great and very nicely balanced but then again I am not your wife Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
harry hayes Posted June 17, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2009 Thank you so much for that. Very helpful. I try to vary what I write, hopefully taking the reader (or audience in this case) up and down. "all sunshine makes a desert......" Best wishes Happy days Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dizzy Posted June 17, 2009 Report Share Posted June 17, 2009 Happy 50th anniversary by the way Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peter T Posted June 17, 2009 Report Share Posted June 17, 2009 Very good, I like it. And I am sure that she will to. Congrats. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wolfie Posted June 17, 2009 Report Share Posted June 17, 2009 Not too many more remain not after she's read it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jerry Posted August 13, 2009 Report Share Posted August 13, 2009 Yes, absolutely lovely, well said. And I also appreciated the comment about -- too much sunshine makes a desert. Lot's of wit and wisdom in Harry's writings. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mary Posted August 13, 2009 Report Share Posted August 13, 2009 I think it is perfect the way it is - Your wife must know you very well by now and will enjoy the fun in the verse along with the sentimentality. Do not change it! It's your heart and love! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Geoffrey Settle Posted August 14, 2009 Report Share Posted August 14, 2009 Very good Harry but I think that the last verse is a bit sad to leave behind as it is grim reaper or not around the corner!! I'm only coming up to my 25th at the end of the month so I've only half your experience. And it is true that us men do foget those three little words. Well done to you both, she certainly does know you inside out by now and will appreciate your words but what about combining the last two verses? Why did three little words, Become so difficult to say? Hear now, dear wife,"I love you" And of course will always "obey" Good Luck... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eagle Posted August 14, 2009 Report Share Posted August 14, 2009 Sorry Geoff, by trying to improve on the original you have failed miserably.....your ending is totally out of context to the previous verses. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
harry hayes Posted August 14, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 14, 2009 Yes, thank you for the comments. I appreciate what Geoff is saying, and he may well be right, but my intention was for people listening to think "Ahhh" - and leave them with a laugh. (cos that's what most of us fellas wonder) Best wishes to you all Happy days Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brendam. Posted August 14, 2009 Report Share Posted August 14, 2009 Your wife will love the verses Harry, they're very good. Congratulations to you both. Bren. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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