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harry hayes
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Don,t worry, there,s only 3 of them in total. Must point out that I am a very old codger so I feel I can only write about nostalgia, or call it wisdom of the ages.

 

Your comments and criticisms will be appreciated.

 

PARTNERS

 

Fifty years we,ve been together,

Not too many more remain.

Should nature but allow it,

How I,d love to start again.

 

We,ve had some laughs together;

The odd tear along the way.

You,ve shared with me each season,

And eased my doubts away.

 

So many times I,ve looked to you,

And sought some best advice;

"Your face is like your passport,

Try smiling once or twice".

 

Our hair looks very grey now -

They,re the ones that don,t fall out.

Wrinkles where the smiles were;

The price of life, no doubt.

 

God,s finger will shortly touch me;

A call I must obey.

So fare-thee-well my dear old mirror,

Reflect another's day.

 

Harry Hayes

31.7.07.

 

Happy days

 

[ 03.08.2007, 12:31: Message edited by: harry hayes ]

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Now I see that as a great song rather than a poem using the first verse as the chorus, and the second as the first verse like this

 

 

We,ve had some laughs together;

The odd tear along the way.

You,ve shared with me each season,

And eased my doubts away.

 

[chorus]

Fifty years we,ve been together,

Not too many more remain.

Should nature but allow it,

How I,d love to start again.

 

So many times I,ve looked to you,

And sought some best advice;

"Your face is like your passport,

Try smiling once or twice".

 

[chorus]Fifty years ...

 

Our hair looks very grey now -

They,re the ones that don,t fall out.

Wrinkles where the smiles were;

The price of life, no doubt.

 

[chorus]Fifty years ...

 

God,s finger will shortly touch me;

A call I must obey.

So fare-thee-well my dear old mirror,

Reflect another's day.

 

[chorus]...repeat

 

 

I just wish I knew about writing music, I would make this into a song (seriously) it would make a beautiful sentimental ballad.

 

guitar or piano solo I think.

 

 

you realy do have some talent.,..seems its took you a while to tap into it, but maybe thats what the benefit of age gives you.

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